You have a Facebook friend living in another country and s/he is curious to learn about a major news item in your country.

#facebook #friend #country #news #item

Dear Sara, I am so sorry I haven't written to you for so long. I have participated in a running competition which was for abandoned children. I am writing

this

letter to inform you about

this

competition. Unfortunately, Iran has been dealing with unpleasant situations in foster houses for the

last

month. Many children who breed in these houses suffer from malnutrition and lack of enough facilities.

Hence

, the governments organized a running competition and each competitor had to donate money to qualify for running. It was a great event since millions of dollars were collected at the event to cover all the expenses for the infrastructure of fosters. I was lucky enough to not only run for children but

also

be a member of the team to organize

this

process.

Finally

, I like to inform you about the upcoming event which is going to be held on 14th September 2022. You make me happy if you and your friends can join us. Love, Dorna

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

6 paragraphs

165 words

4.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.5

Complete response

4.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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