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Dear Sara, I am so sorry I haven't written to you for so long. I have participated in a running competition which was for abandoned children. I am writing

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letter to inform you about

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competition. Unfortunately, Iran has been dealing with unpleasant situations in foster houses for the

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month. Many children who breed in these houses suffer from malnutrition and lack of enough facilities.

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, the governments organized a running competition and each competitor had to donate money to qualify for running. It was a great event since millions of dollars were collected at the event to cover all the expenses for the infrastructure of fosters. I was lucky enough to not only run for children but

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be a member of the team to organize

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process.

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, I like to inform you about the upcoming event which is going to be held on 14th September 2022. You make me happy if you and your friends can join us. Love, Dorna

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.5

Complete response

4.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

165 words

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You have a Facebook friend living in another country and s/he is curious to learn about a major news item in your country.

Fully explain your ideas

Nowadays in many countries people are following the latest fashion, hairstyles and clothing. Why are they influenced by fashion? Is it a positive or a negative development?

Some people say that all people should stay in full-time education until they are at least 18. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think the manufacturers and shopping malls should sell fewer packaged products while others argue that people have the responsibility to buy products with less packaging. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shopping on line.