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Some people believe it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Human beings face various types of situations in
life
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. Some conditions are good while some can be bad in
life
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.
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 the attempt to solve them. Many
people
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 think dissatisfaction at work can be due to many reasons, one of them is having
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 little source of income. Low salaries provoked
people
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 to increase the crime rates. Some
people
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 get involved in lending
money
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 from
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 market, and when they are not able to repay the
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, they start hiding the truth.
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 debt,
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 and being insolvent are
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people
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 cannot accept the negative situation and end up hiding or getting lost somewhere.
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 some highly educated and qualified groups of society think that the simple solution to the problem is to start earning
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, in order to boost the financial conditions. In
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 they believe that everyone is not born with a silver spoon in their mouth.
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 means that not everyone is born rich. Working, not only hard but
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, smart makes them intelligent in finding ways to earn
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 and enhance their current situation. To conclude, there can be a variety of things happening in and around us, not everything can be good nor everything can be bad. Accepting the unpleasant can be a part of
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, but not trying to improve upon it won't be helpful at all. In other ways, if we want to overcome any situation in
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, we have to work towards it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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