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Nowadays people make new friends through social networks and internet chat groups. Some people think this is good. Others think that face-to-face interaction is essential. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Many
people
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 nowadays struggle with making friends offline due to the pandemic restrictions. It is obvious that
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internet
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the internet
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 could be a helpful instrument to do
this
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,
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however
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 there is a belief that live communication is a
nessecity
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necessity
 for having a friendship. I gravitate to those who think that social networks
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 a powerful tool for meeting new
people
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, but face-to-face contact is crucial in long-term relationships too. On the one hand,
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internet
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 provides us with broad channels of communications around the globe and it is
less
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a less
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time consuming
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 option than travelling.
Person
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A person
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 could make connections with individuals from different countries without having to go from his or her room. Multicultural
network
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networks
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 provide
people
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 with a huge amount of information that could be helpful for learning new languages and
exploaring
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exploring
 new cultures.
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, texting with a friend who is a native speaker is a more fun tool for
practicing
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 vocabulary than reading books.
Internet
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 could be an easy way to make international friends.
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, social media do not provide emotional contact and
transperancy
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transparency
 between
people
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 and only face-to-face meetings could cover
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 issue. Frauds that
done
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throught
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through
throughout
 the
internet
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 are common today and for
this
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reason
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 it is more difficult to build
a
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trust without seeing each other.
Moreover
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, body language and eye contact is
a
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apply
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crucial
part
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parts
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 of interaction for strong relationships.
For example
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,
person
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a person
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 could have a prediction about personality based on someones
appearence
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appearance
 from photos and only offline
date
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data
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 will make a non-biased impression about the person. Live communication is vital for
strong
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a strong
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 friendship. To conclude,
social
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the social
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 network is a good tool for meeting new
people
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 from a
variaty
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variety
 of nations,
thus
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 offline interactions are essential for building
a trustful relationships
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trustful relationships
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 with new
people
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. I believe that the best option is to combine both methods.
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