Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your opinion.

In the contemporary world, few individuals like to undertake modern things, for case place to visit and sort of nourishment. Other individuals favour
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doing things
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are commonplace.
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essay discusses both views of the opinion and gives some examples. Obviously,
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first
type
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, they are very
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place, the more
people
want to go.
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, new things can play
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role in every
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life and
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future. They travel
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cities which they enjoy going
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and more energetic. The
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people
are not interested in what
people
say, they think, they have a lot of
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.
Such
people
can find passion in every job and do their job meticulously. If a person does not have passion, I do not think it makes
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sense
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,
everyone
has a choice
everyone
should know that their choice is right. If someone else denies it, they will change their
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choice
. I think it is crazy.
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choice
is right and law
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  • Novelty
  • Routine
  • Comfort zone
  • Risk-taker
  • Risk-averse
  • Enrichment
  • Personal growth
  • Innovation
  • Creativity
  • Stability
  • Tradition
  • Habit
  • Familiarity
  • Personal enrichment
  • Life stages
  • Fulfilling
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