Men and women employed in full-time jobs should share the responsibilities of household chores. Do you agree or disagree? Share relevant personal experiences.

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Our modern world has made changes to how

duties

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should be shared at

home

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. In the past

women

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were responsible for domestic

duties

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while

men

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were the only

breedwinners

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breadwinners

breadwinner

. Changes in

this

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trend

has

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subsequently

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influenced responsibility for family and

household

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duties

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. I

beleive

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believe

that it is better to

aportion

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a portion

apportion

portion

household

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duties

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equally.

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, since

men

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are not the only

breedwinner

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breadwinner

any more

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anymore

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women

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are not fully responsible for the

household

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duties

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either. Both financial and

household

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duties

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should be shared. Previously

men

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had to shoulder all financial

aspect

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aspects

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of life and

women

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had to keep

home

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clean, cook and raise children.

Fortunatly

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Fortunately

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this

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trend has changed and

women

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can pursue their

career

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careers

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Furthermore

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, working

women

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face many issues in their daily life and it is not fair to expect them both to work out and in the

home

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Also

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some chores like cooking

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are

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demanding

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a demanding

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job and if family cares about healthy eating, rather

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than

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that

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than

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eating out, both

men

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and

women

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should cook in turn.

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men

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are naturally stronger than

women

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and

some times

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sometimes

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can act better to do domestic

duties

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, some sort of cleaning like washing

carperts

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carpets

need

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apply

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physical strength. To sum up,

men

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and

women

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are equal.

Women

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are not

housewifes

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housewives

housewife

any more

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anymore

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As a

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result

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men

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are given some responsibilities at

home

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too. While taking care of a house need a great

amount

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of time

men

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are involved.

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Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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meeting the goal of 7 or more
5
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
21
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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236 words

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Men and women employed in full-time jobs should share the responsibilities of household chores. Do you agree or disagree? Share relevant personal experiences.

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