Men and women employed in full-time jobs should share the responsibilities of household chores. Do you agree or disagree? Share relevant personal experiences.

Our modern world has made changes to how
duties
should be shared at
home
. In the past
women
were responsible for domestic
duties
while
men
were the only
breedwinners
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breadwinners
breadwinner
. Changes in
this
trend
has
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subsequently
influenced responsibility for family and
household
duties
. I
beleive
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believe
that it is better to
aportion
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a portion
apportion
portion
household
duties
equally.
Firstly
, since
men
are not the only
breedwinner
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breadwinner
any more
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anymore
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,
women
are not fully responsible for the
household
duties
either. Both financial and
household
duties
should be shared. Previously
men
had to shoulder all financial
aspect
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aspects
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of life and
women
had to keep
home
clean, cook and raise children.
Fortunatly
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Fortunately
Unfortunately
this
trend has changed and
women
can pursue their
career
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careers
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.
Furthermore
, working
women
face many issues in their daily life and it is not fair to expect them both to work out and in the
home
.
Also
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,Also
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some chores like cooking
is
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are
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demanding
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a demanding
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job and if family cares about healthy eating, rather
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than
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that
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than
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eating out, both
men
and
women
should cook in turn.
Moreover
,
men
are naturally stronger than
women
and
some times
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sometimes
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can act better to do domestic
duties
.
For instance
, some sort of cleaning like washing
carperts
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carpets
need
a
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apply
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physical strength. To sum up,
men
and
women
are equal.
Women
are not
housewifes
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housewives
housewife
any more
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anymore
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.
As a
result
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men
are given some responsibilities at
home
too. While taking care of a house need a great
amount
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number
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of time
men
are involved.
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