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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be compulsory part of high school programs (for example, working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Recently, the debate on whether
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 unpaid community service into the high school curriculum has been heated. As for as
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 part of school programs can teach students
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 more about others and the society, which can benefit teenagers as well as
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 a better characteristic.
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 with, students may pay more attention to
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 of themselves after the community service. As teenagers
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nowadays are indulged in electronic devices and social media and have little attention to problems
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 around them. They may be pleased
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 what they already have
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compulsory
  • unpaid community service
  • charity
  • neighborhood improvement
  • teaching sports
  • empathy
  • social justice
  • transferable skills
  • teamwork
  • leadership
  • problem-solving
  • civic duty
  • civic engagement
  • educational enhancement
  • practical experiences
  • academic learning
  • real-world applications
  • social cohesion
  • mutual support
  • time management
  • balancing priorities
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