Some people believe that unpaid community service should be compulsory part of high school programs (for example, working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Recently, the debate on whether to put unpaid community service into the high school curriculum has been heated. As for as I am conceded, let the volunteer work be a compulsory part of school programs can teach students to care more about others and the society, which can benefit teenagers as well as create a better characteristic.

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social issues. As teenagers nowadays are indulged in electronic devices and care little about the community problems. Adding community service in class can give them

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shoes.

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in front of students They may be pleased with what they already have

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Grammar mistakes
 

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be compulsory part of high school programs (for example, working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

People living in large cites today face many problems in their everyday life. What are these problems? Should governments encourage people to move to smaller regional towns?

In the past, most people worked for small businesses, while more people now work for large businesses. What are the advantages and disadvantages of working for large businesses?

Parents are the best teachers Do you agree or disagree ?

Every day, millions of tons of food are wasted all over the world. Why do you think this is happening? And how can we solve this problem?

Some people think that travel is necessary to learn about other nations. Others however think TV and internet are best way to learn about other countries. Discuss both views and give your opinion.