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Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think that school time should be used in learning important subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Recently, there has been a controversial debate on whether schools should teach
students
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 about the
science
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 and preparation of
food
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. While others consider important subjects should be taught in
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 time. As far as I am concerned, learning the basic survival skill is
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 a crucial task that needs to learn from
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.
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, both views will be discussed below.
To begin
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 with, the
science
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 and preparation of
food
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 is a fundamental knowledge that needs to learn by everyone. As some parents may have busy jobs and have no time to teach their children about cooking or
food
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 safety,
students
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 may have trouble feeding themselves or put themselves in danger by the improper use of the kitchen.
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, the misuse of
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 may cause disease.
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, introducing the
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 study into the
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 curriculum can prevent
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 accidents as
students
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 have a basic understanding of
food
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.
On the contrary
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, some people think adding
food
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 study is a waste of time in
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. As the mainstream classes
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 as Chinese, English and mathematics are the most important subjects in
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. And the main purpose for
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 to learn in
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 is for the final exam.
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, those fundamental living skills should not be taught in
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.
However
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, in my opinion, the addition of
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science
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 can
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school
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 life and give teenagers more passion for learning. In conclusion, studying the
science
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 of
food
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 and how to prepare it can give a basic understanding and living skill for
students
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,
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, it can make the
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 life more interesting.
Although
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 some people think it’s not appropriate to teach
food
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 in
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, learning different skills are
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 important and survival skills should be prioritized.
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