Now a days, many families are rarely having meals together. Why is this happening? Is this a positive or a negative development.

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Recently , the issue of getting together in many families for having meals has grown . In my opinion, having a tight schedule can cause
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convinced that being unable to see your parents or sibling have an adverse effect on one's feeling. It is my view that
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these days ,many
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have a heavy workload and they find it difficult to get together with their family .Advancement in technology has several effects on
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lives and many
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find it fulfilling to earn money through the internet .
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, they are willing to spend their extra time on the network to earn money even when they come home from the work .
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social media
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as Facebook and Whatsapp
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would rather interact with others through these websites and it can cause
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unable to get together with their family . I
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believe that not spending adequate time with family
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parents have several adverse effects on one's feeling.
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mental problems
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as depression and homesickness. in my experience, the
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suffer from homesickness .
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social media is not enough and they need to meet their parents physically .many elderly
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attitude toward the widespread use of the internet and they
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that it led to see their children less than before. In conclusion
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. having a tight schedule has led to
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.From my perspective ,
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who are unable to visit their
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are more likely to suffer from mental problems.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Modern lifestyles
  • Busy schedules
  • Family dynamics
  • Individual activities
  • Convenience culture
  • Distracted dining
  • Cultural shifts
  • Family bonding
  • Communication breakdown
  • Home-cooked meals
  • Independence
  • Adapting traditions
  • Societal expectations
  • Nutritional wellbeing
  • Mealtime interactions
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