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Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages?

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In recent times, social
media
 is the biggest platform for communication, which has been routinely used by all
people
 from all age limits.
Although
 there are many downsides to
use
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 a social network, especially the threats of information leak, social
media
 can help in developing
cultural
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 and communication. I completely agree that
the
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positive development will overcome the drawbacks. On the one hand, social
media
 improves the social life of human beings.
Initially
, it acts as a source for better communication.
For instance
, a Facebook user from India can communicate
to
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 a user in Antarctica.
Secondly
, it improves
people
 interest in
a different cultural aspects
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different cultural aspects
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. In fact, by online platforms, we come across users from different cultural
background
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backgrounds
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, where they share their activities. A shining example,
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a
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 Instagram user from China
can
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 share the cultural events happening in their country
to
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with
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people
 all over the world. So, it brings about attracting
people
 to know more about
such
 festivals. In my opinion, these are the major worth of using social
media
.
On the other hand
, they
also
 provide forged information and unauthorized usage of data.
This
 is to say, most of the social
media
 counts are created using fake details which ultimately leads to major problems.
For example
, data shows that more than one-
third
 of
the
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Facebook accounts are bogus which most of the
times
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time
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 lead to criminal problems.
Besides
, their accounts have been hacked and personal pictures are shared without their consent. Though there are limited disadvantages of social
media
, the benefits are more significant. To sum up,
although
 information
leak
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leaks
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create
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a great deal of
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a lot of
many
plenty of
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 risks, social
media
 brings
the
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people
 together and
to
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improve their knowledge of diverse cultures.
Thus
, I strongly believe that their disadvantages will never overpower
its
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 advantage s.
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