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Human activities over the period of time have increased global warming. What are the primary causes? What solutions can you suggest?

#activities #period #time
Well, it is a common issue that
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 in today's world that global warming is increasing due to human interference. The main reasons for it are overconsumption of coal and fossil fuel and degradation. Every problem has a solution so, it can be tackled by aware
the
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people
 to save
environment
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the environment
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 and clean
the
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natural resources like
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wildlife
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wild life
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 and
seas
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.
Firstly
, the
over utilization
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 of coal and petroleum for doing works should be stopped which can help to decrease the
pollution
 in the environment. Most of
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 spread in
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 because of vehicles so,
people
 need to reduce the use of cars and bikes.
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last
 year in Delhi,
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 made
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 rule to reduce the traffic in that way they decreased the
pollution
.
Secondly
,
people
also
 decline the cutting of trees for their satisfaction. It is recorded that
people
 do over
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 of
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 to earn some money. According to
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the survey
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, it shows that 70%
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wild life
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 destroyed because of wood and animals skull and leather
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,
this
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problem
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 solved by society and lawmakers initiative if they work together they can save the world for upcoming generations.If the government makes any law for
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 fare of society they should obey that rule.
For instance
 , the folks need to reduce the use of coal and petroleum. They need to find alternative ways like increasing the use of natural gas
instead
 of petroleum. In conclusion,
although
pollution
 is increased the global warming that can cause many problems, it can be tackled by awarding the
people
 so that, they can help to save the environment for upcoming generations. Society needs to plant more trees and clean
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 surroundings.
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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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