Modern medical science has made it possible to combat many diseases. This is one reason that people are living longer lives now than they did in the past. Discuss the effects this might have on society.

Current modern medicine has brought each individual an
oppoturnity
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opportunity
to live
longer
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life
. Drugs have been manufactured to cure many common diseases
also
to alleviate the variety of
archonic
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chronic
conditions.
This
has obvious
benifit
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benefits
benefit
for
persioners
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pensioners
prisoners
, but the upside for society
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a bit less certain.
To begin
with,
beacause
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because
of modern medical equipment,
people
nowadays not only live longer but live
healthier
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life
, too. Fewer
people
die young of communicable diseases due to the fact that there are many drugs as treatment methods to prevent
such
symptoms.
Furthermore
, current medical science entails better qualifications for doctors.
Consequently
,
this
leads to that the
life
of the bulk of older
people
are
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also
enhanced effectively.
The
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longer
life
, in
positive
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way, helps us to enjoy and explore the world more than shorter. Notwithstanding the benefit listed above, there are still many
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of
the
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modern medicine. More
people
living longer is considered that a larger fraction of society is made up of an ageing population. If
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of these
people
are past retirement age, that means they are not significantly making a contribution to
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economy.
In addition
, the longer
people
live, the more resources they use, and society must conceive of ways to supply for their needs. To summarize,
therefore
, allopathic medicine
have
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its advantages
also
disadvantages.
However
, in my opinion,
the
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longer
life
is always
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the thing
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that all of us are looking towards.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • geriatric medicine
  • chronic conditions
  • retirement age
  • pension payouts
  • caregiving roles
  • assisted living technologies
  • age-related research
  • cultural norms
  • ageism
  • intergenerational relationships
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