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percentage of the population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010

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The bar chart illustrates the percentages of males, females and
children
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 in the UK consuming the recommended daily amount of
fruit
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 and
vegetables
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, in three separate years (2002, 2006 and 2010). Overall, the proportion of all groups eating
fruit
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 and
vegetables
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 increased over the period shown.
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, while women had a tendency to consume these foods the most, the group who ate the least amount of
fruit
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 and vegetable was
children
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. As can be seen from the chart, in 2002, approximately a quarter of females in the UK ate
fruit
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 and
vegetables
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.
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 was followed by nearly 22% of males consuming these foods daily, which was double that of
children
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. Over the following eight years, the figures for all groups increased to reach peaks in 2006 in which the figure for women was highest at just over 30%. By 2010,
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, the percentage of females, males and
children
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 eating
fruit
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 and
vegetables
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 had decreased slightly to 27%, 24% and 14% of respectively.
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