Computers are now the basis of the modern world. They should therefore be introduced into classrooms, and their programs used for direct teaching purposes. However, dependence on computers in teaching may carry a certain degree of risk to students.

In
this
modern world, technology is rapidly
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. One of the
technology
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that has been developed until now is
computer
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a computer
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. We can not deny that
computers
help us to efficiently solve our daily problems,
such
as analyzing data and solving complex mathematical problems in school.
Therefore
introducing
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computer
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into
classroom
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is an important thing.
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the other hand, dependence on
computers
especially in
clasrrom
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classroom
classrooms
may cause a certain risk for
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the student
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student
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students
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. Here, I explain my point of view of
computers
as
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in teaching.
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a
lot
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advantages as a helping tool for
teachers
and
students
in
classroom
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the classroom
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. One of the advantages is that
computers
help
student
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to do their task way faster than using paper or pencils.
This
will save time both for
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and
also
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a teacher
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teacher
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.
Computer
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also
help
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both parties to find
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of reference for class material by connecting
computers
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internet
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the internet
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. As for me, I believe that using
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a computer
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computer
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in direct teaching will clearly help
student
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and
teachers
to increase their critical thinking.
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the other side, using
computers
in
classroom
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could build
the
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dependence
characther
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character
on
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student
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.
Students
may refuse to use conventional tools
such
as pen or paper to finish their
assesment
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assessment
. They would think that will take a longer time.
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will
also
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to do the class task as an individual or we can say that most
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students
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will not accept to do a working group project.
This
situation will probably decrease
students
' socializing
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. In the end, using
computers
on
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student
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could
also
decrease their creativity.
Computers
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very essential in helping
teachers
to transfer
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or class materials to
students
. But in the end, it is way important to keep on giving
a
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proper
guidence
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guidance
by
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teachers
to
students
so that
computers
will not giving
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impacts.

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