These days, more and more people move away from the area where they were born and brought up when they become adults. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There are several

countries

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are under-development, they have lower standards as compared to developing and developed nations. The movement from developing

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to developed nations has become a controversial issue. There are several repercussions of moving out along with the benefits.

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development settling in wealthy

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is beneficial and its advantages overweigh its negatives. The several positive

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of moving out strikes to my mind are

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education, advanced medical health facilities and expedition opportunities. Developed

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have better systems managed by

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which give options to people to study in

advanced

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education system and apply that knowledge to

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. To access these facilities people prefer to move out of their birthplaces.

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, employment is

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another reason, some teenagers study in their own country but get the better opportunities of work out of state,

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they move.

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, people get disconnected from their roots and have to live away from their

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for the betterment of their future. To meet the standards of living with

rich

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they leave the comfort of their home.

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, a survey was conducted in Australia to examine the population from overseas who moved permanently which showed that half of them moved alone for employment opportunities. In conclusion,

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home sickness

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is a factor

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deter

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a person to leave home

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the benefits and perks in wealthy nations attract students and adults.

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lifestyle makes

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living away from family advantageous,

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the negatives are overlooked.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 4.5

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In some countries the number of police officers in active service is decreasing. What do you think maybe the reason for this? What effects might this have on society?