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Some people say that protecting the environment is the government's responsibility. Others believe that every individual should be responsible for it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

#people #environment #government #responsibility
First of all, I believe that every human on
this
 earth must be responsible for the
environment
. I have read in one article that human is the only living creature on earth that destroy the
environment
. Humans are too greedy, they excavate almost all the natural resources for their own sake. Some of them
maybe
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 take responsibility by carrying out these activities with the principle of sustainable energy, yet, some of them still do not care at all. In my view, individuals should be responsible for their
environment
. If they can not do something big to save the earth, at least, they can do something small
to
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 their surrounding.
For instance
, individuals can start to sort their waste for recycling, use public transportation to
minimalize
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 air pollution, and many more.
However
, the
government
also
 play a big part in protecting the
environment
. In my country, even
there
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though there
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 are regulations that aim to protect the
environment
, the
citizen
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 still
breaking
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 the rules. To show that, there is a regulation to not litter
into
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 the river, but, some households still do
this
,
even
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and even
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 some big factories still do
this
. It seems to me,
my
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that my
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 country's
government
 does not take
the
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environmental problems as a serious problem, so they still give leeway.
Furthermore
, since my country's literate and educational rates are still low I think
that is
 one of the reasons why the city still breaking the rules about the
environment
. Because they do not know the consequences. In conclusion, it is both individual and
government
 responsibility to take care of the
environment
, but not in the same scope. Individuals can take action against their surroundings.
But
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 the
government
 should take action from the root to build a foundation for environmental awareness.

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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that the introduction clearly introduces the main topic and opinion. The conclusion should summarize the main points and provide a final opinion. Also, maintain a clear and structured sequence of ideas throughout the essay.
Task Achievement
The essay partially addresses the task by discussing both views and giving an opinion. However, the opinion is not clearly stated in the introduction. Make sure to present a clear opinion in the introduction and address both views throughout the essay.

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