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Travelling in group with a tour guide is the best way to travel. Do you agree or disagree with this statement.

#group #tour #guide #travel
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mandatory
life
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 travelling is play a very crucial role because it helps us to enjoy our life. Some people think that the best way
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 travelling is considered to be with
tour
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a tour
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guide
instead
 of alone. I agree with
this
 statement. There are some reasons why
tour
guide
 and
group
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a group
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 of
freinds
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friends
 need while travelling.
tThe
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the
first
 and foremost reason is that
tour
guide
help
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 us to show that places which we do not have
idea
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an idea
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 about them.
Moreover
,
tour
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the tour
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guide
 has good knowledge regarding
history
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the history
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 of that place. So,
one
 can get
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broaden
broken
 their horizon while travelling.
Furthermore
, with
group
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a group
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one
 can enjoy
most
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it most
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 as compared to alone because with
freinds
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friends
 they can take pictures as
a
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apply
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memories and they can eat together as well as if during travelling
one
 person feel under the weather
then
 their
freinds
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friends
 can help them. In conclusion, even though
one
 person can travel but without
freinds
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friends
 and
tour
guide
 he can not enjoy.
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  • educational
  • logistics
  • convenience
  • exclusive experiences
  • safety and security
  • spontaneous adventures
  • historical sites
  • cultural practices
  • landmarks
  • insights
  • socialization
  • lifelong friendships
  • restrictive
  • authentic experiences
  • skip-the-line
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