As water is a valuable resource, governments all over the world should control how much water their citizens use To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Everyone knows that we need
water
to survive. We
also
use
it for many of our daily activities .
However
, some countries shouldn't control to using the
water
while
another
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authorities need to pay attention carefully which is using the tool. I think that It depends on where you live
A
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mount
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amount
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of
water
a
country
has is linked to its whether. Especially, in European countries have been
a great deal of
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a lot of
many
plenty of
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rainfalls.
Consequently
, the authority does not demand the mineral tool how much used the
water
from
itself
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its
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population during the year. Families can
use
the
water
as much as possible due to no limit. How do people
use
the
water
that
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community even do not know which is more convenient and should not waste as much as you can
.
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We can see that if the
water
has not enough which is
country
.
This
country
's humans quite appreciate and
then
they know, how to
use
the
water
or what is things actually needs
water
. On top of that their
country
needs to distribute to their public but
this
kind of authority can not manage. They can be Africa, Australia, the Middle East .
Therefore
public can not
use
too much.
Although
, it is hard to collect and
then
deliver to
population
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the population
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. In my opinion, the pair of
reason
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reasons
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have that one of basis is rainfall that it has less raining another argument
that is
agriculture.
public
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can start to actively notice because of gain is coming behind the agriculture and maybe it might be
reason
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the reason
a reason
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. If
Europe
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countries need to restrict
to
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itself
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their
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population and
then
a
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plenty of
water
will collect in
river
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the river
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after that river goes the
water
to
poor
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a poor
the poor
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country
.
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