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As water is a valuable resource, governments all over the world should control how much water their citizens use To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Everyone knows that we need
water
 to survive. We
also
use
 it for many of our daily activities .
However
, some countries shouldn't control to using the
water
 while
another
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 authorities need to pay attention carefully which is using the tool. I think that It depends on where you live
A
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mount
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amount
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 of
water
 a
country
 has is linked to its whether. Especially, in European countries have been
a great deal of
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a lot of
many
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 rainfalls.
Consequently
, the authority does not demand the mineral tool how much used the
water
 from
itself
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its
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 population during the year. Families can
use
 the
water
 as much as possible due to no limit. How do people
use
 the
water
 that
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the
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community even do not know which is more convenient and should not waste as much as you can
.
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 We can see that if the
water
 has not enough which is
country
.
This
country
's humans quite appreciate and
then
 they know, how to
use
 the
water
 or what is things actually needs
water
. On top of that their
country
 needs to distribute to their public but
this
 kind of authority can not manage. They can be Africa, Australia, the Middle East .
Therefore
 public can not
use
 too much.
Although
, it is hard to collect and
then
 deliver to
population
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the population
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. In my opinion, the pair of
reason
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reasons
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have that one of basis is rainfall that it has less raining another argument
that is
 agriculture.
public
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the public
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 can start to actively notice because of gain is coming behind the agriculture and maybe it might be
reason
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the reason
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 . If
Europe
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 countries need to restrict
to
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apply
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itself
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their
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 population and
then
a
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plenty of
water
 will collect in
river
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the river
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 after that river goes the
water
 to
poor
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a poor
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country
.
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