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Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your opinion.

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While some prefer to discover absolutely new opportunities for their leisure or spending free
time
, others do not even try to do something unique in their daily
life
. From my point of view, discovering new challenges for yourself is a really good opportunity, but meanwhile staying with your usual habits is normal too. It is clear that there are numerous advantages
of
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 trying something new.
First
, it can broaden your horizons significantly by studying
new
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 world.
Second
,
people
, who dedicate their
time
 to
discover
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unopened
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 world's sides have big amount of knowledge about various events.
Last
 but not least, during
this
 opportunity of trying something new or having a variety of meals, an individual can improve his
life
, by finding leisure activity which is liked by him. On the other side, we have
people
 who do not imagine their
life
 with something unique even it is a new type of delicious meal or an adventurous place. They say that these kinds of humans do not need changes in their
life
 so they already have everything they need. As far as I am concerned, who thinks so have a little problem - lack of imagination or simple laziness.
However
, we do not need to forget a bunch of
people
 who do not have
time
 to discover unique places or
challenging
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 themselves with new activities.
In other words
, there are individuals who could not afford to spend
time
 for leisure. It means CEO of transatlantic corporations
such
 as Apple, Google, Meta, Tesla or Microsoft.
This
 category of
people
have
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 a big number of duties that create
them
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 lack
of
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time
.
Additionally
, our world has a huge amount of
people
 who scare of even thinking about changing something in their lives. To conclude, despite the fact that we have different advantages by
traveling
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, sightseeing or having a foreign meal, there are some
people
 who stay where they are.
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  • Risk-taker
  • Risk-averse
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  • Personal growth
  • Innovation
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