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Nuclear power is far too dangerous. Therefore, countries should ban it’s use and concentrate instead on developing alternative sources of energy such as hydroelectric power, wind power and solar power.

#power #countries #ban #it’s #alternative #sources #energy #wind
The deadly usage of Atom
bomb
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 in Hiroshima and Nagasaki not only ended World War II
,
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 but
also
 scared the world for
usage
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 of nuclear
power
. Atomic source of
enegery
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energy
 which was considered
as
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clean
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 and green source of
energy
 suddenly became the fearsome factor, pushing the countries across the globe to start looking for
the
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renewable
sources
 of
energy
. With the Industrial
revolution
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, there was a rise in
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 of fossil
fuel based
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 energies.
Although
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 they were efficient and effective,
non-renewables
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sources
 were
major
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source
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 of air and water pollution. Extensive mining beneath the earth
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 brought earthquakes and soil corrosion. Alternatively,
option
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 of nuclear
power
 was tested, where
risk
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 factor of lives and economy was extremely high, resulting in
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of
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 natural
sources
 of
energy
. According to Newton’s Law, “
Energy
 can neither be created nor be destroyed, it can be just transformed from one form to another.” Leveraging natural
sources
such
 as the sun, wind and flow of water for
power
 generation was non-polluting and affordable. Comparatively, renewable
sources
 of
energy
 are safer than non-renewable ones.
Country
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 like India is blessed by
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mother nature, where there are many regions with the Sun
shinning
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 round the year, flowing rivers and seashores in all four corners and windy regions appropriate for
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power
 generation. Fostering the development of green
energy
 will
also
 bring accolades to the country and
people
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 of the nation. While nuclear
power
 generation creates doubts and mistrust among the nations, institutions like Internation Solar Alliance creates trust and mutually benefiting relations with one
aother
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another
. Solar
power
, wind
power
 and
hyrdoelectric
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hydroelectric
power
 can turn the dream of
billion
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 people nation of 24x7 affordable
power
 for all into reality.
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