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Traffic and housing problems could be solved by moving large companies, factories, and their employees to the countryside. Do you agree or disagree?

#traffic #companies #factories #employees #countryside
Quite often large companies are located in the
city
 centre in sky-scrapers or big factory buildings and
this
 causes traffic and housing problems. Some
people
 propose a solution to move
such
 organisations to the countryside. Personally, I agree that
such
 a step could solve some issues but potentially could
also
 cause some others, so let’s look at
this
 a little bit closer.
Firstly
, traffic issues are sourced from a disproportion of
transport
 communications throughput and amount of
people
 travelling to/from
work
 during rush hour. So relocating workplaces to the countryside will
also
 require a well-organised transportation system to prevent traffic in that area. The big difference in constructing a modern
transport
 solution in the
city
 centre and the suburbs is that there is much more space in the new place and there are no limitations with historical buildings and existing communications.
Therefore
 transportation difficulties may be solved
this
 way.
Secondly
, housing problems are tightly connected with
people
's travels during the workday. During the day and after
work
,
people
 usually experience needs in shops, cafes, cinemas and other cultural/entertainment places which are usually located in the
city
 centre and sometimes unique. In
this
 case, it looks like it’s not completely possible to separate the central area of a
city
 from living areas and working places.
Thus
 to solve crowding issues in the
city
 it’s required to not only move large companies outside the
city
 but
also
 create a well-organized
transport
 system to allow
people
 to travel fast and easily from home to
work
 and entertainment places. In summary, in some cases, relocating big organisations for sure will help to rebalance the load and keep central historical areas preserved. Still, if it’s possible to enhance the existing
transport
 communication
then
 it should be considered as an option while nowadays new opportunities like remote
work
 have become available.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • housing problems
  • countryside
  • large companies
  • factories
  • employees
  • urban areas
  • land availability
  • relocate
  • stimulate economic development
  • challenges
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • rural areas
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