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You recently heard about some new jobs at a local department store. You would like to work there. Write a letter to store manager of the department store. In your letter, -Explain how you heard about the job -Describe the kind of job you would like to have -Give details of your experience and qualifications

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to apply for the
store
 manager
position
 that you advertised in The Sunday Morning newspaper
last
 Monday. I found
this
position
 suits my future career aspiration as I have been working as a
store
 manager
assistant
 for almost 4 years now. I am keen to take up new challenges with more responsibilities like the
position
 you advertised. I have been working in the retail industry for more than 8 years, which includes the
assistant
position
 I mentioned earlier. I started to work as a
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storekeeper
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store keeper
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 at a small clothing
store
 outside of Sydney city right after my graduation from the design faculty of the University of New South Wales. I quickly get promoted as a senior fashion specialist because many customers felt satisfied with my service, and it generated a sustainable profit for the small
store
. Not very long after, the
store
 manager hired me as the
assistant
 to replace the previous
assistant
 who left the company, and that because my performance was excellent too. Thank you for your attention and I am looking forward to hearing from you. Sincerely Sur
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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