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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology.

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It is always argued that some
people
 think that
students
 should
study
 in their favourite field while others believe that
students
 should
study
 just in science and
technology
subjects
 that will be useful in the
future
. In fact, in my point of view,
people
 should be able to
study
 whatever they like without thinking about the
future
.
To begin
 with, many
people
 think as we have the chance of living for once, it is really important to try and experience our favourite
subjects
. So
students
 should be able to
study
 in their passion without thinking about
future
 needs.
However
, studying in some
subjects
 that the
students
 didn't have any talent or interest in can destroy their confidence and make them feel unuseful.
In addition
, even in the
future
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 we need lots of professionals in all various
fields
 to complete our society.
For example
, we need an artist or a singer as much as a doctor or an engineer to make the balance.
On the other hand
, some
people
 think in the
future
 those are just some
fields
 related to science and
technology
 will be useful and other knowledge will be destroyed or not useful in our
future
 life. They
also
 think that in the
future
 with all the improvements,
people
 can do the other
subjects
 with their technical knowledge.
For example
, they think it will be possible to write songs and make music with high-quality computers
instead
 of an artist. So they think it will be unimportant to
study
 in other
fields
 not related to
technology
. In conclusion, some
people
 think that just the
subjects
 related to science or
technology
 will be important to
study
 while I think even in the
future
 we need balance in our society to enjoy our life whit all our needs and
although
 it is much more important to let the
students
 to freely choose their favourite
fields
 to
study
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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