Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today's world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

First
of all,
History
is
most
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the most
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important subject at school and at university. The
people
always choose
Humanitary
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Humanity
and Technology.
The
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apply
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History
is
idelogy
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ideology
for
people
. Not to be Country
not
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History
.
Thats
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That's
That
why everybody must about himself
History
. The pupil has to research
History
how one of the most important
subject
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subjects
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.
For instance
, in
2
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the 2
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world war when
the
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Hitler
attack
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attacked
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Soviet
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the Soviet
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country many
people
died.
People
begun
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began
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think
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to think
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about war, health, other
people
.
Thats
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That's
That
why
History
must know every person. That He
don't
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didn't
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start attack to other country or other
people
. Nowadays, when
have
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having
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a lot of smart technologies
people
use many
smartphone
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smartphones
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, TV-set,
laptop
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laptops
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, and other technologies. And they are made
everyday
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every day
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.
For example
, the
Ilon
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Iron
Mask introduced more technologies for thanks
science
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to science
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and He is a rich man.
Thats
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That's
That
That is
why, the pupil must study
History
and Science and Technology for
future
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the future
show examples
.
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  • crucial
  • comprehend
  • retrospect
  • gain insights
  • reflect on
  • sharpen
  • evaluate
  • significance
  • heritage
  • legacy
  • advent
  • breakthroughs
  • sustain
  • sustainability
  • revolutions
  • empowered
  • overcome
  • transform
  • advancements
  • collaboration
  • cooperation
  • diversity
  • fulfilling
  • promote
  • facilitate
  • prosperity
  • enhance
  • foster
  • foundation
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