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In some countries, the government is encouraging businesses and industries to move outside city centers and relocate to regional areas. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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Nowadays, there are an increasing number of businesses and
industries
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 and because of that, the government is suggesting
them
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 to move in rural
areas
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 from urban
cities
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. In
this
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 matter, advantages and benefits
such
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 as wider spaces at cheaper prices are coming together with difficulties and disadvantages like transportation problems for them.
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 with,
cities
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 are mostly already populated and congested so they can't get enough space that they need but land prices are cheaper and more available in rural
areas
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, which is beneficial to businesses.
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, people from the countryside will get more job opportunities and no more need to go to
cities
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 to get a job. For employers, they can
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 hire workers from the countryside with lower salaries than workers from city
centers
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.
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,
industries
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 produce greenhouse gases that can harm people in populated
cities
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 with no place to get fresh air so
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also
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 good reason
industries
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 should move to regional
areas
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.
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, transportation in regional
areas
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 is not developed as much as in urban
cities
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,
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, delivering products from
industries
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 to
cities
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 will cost more than necessary.
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, communication
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 serves as the main feature in business, and if internet connection, the key to communication, might not be reliable, it would adversely affect companies. For many companies, consumers, clients, providers and many other contacts are mostly from
cities
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 so moving away from
customer
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the customer
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 base is not beneficial. In conclusion, running
business
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businesses
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 and
industries
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 outside city
centers
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centres
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 may have some issues for employers but the most common result is that moving to regional
areas
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clerarly
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clearly
 appears to be a favour not only for the city dwellers but
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 for the residents in rural
areas
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