Films and computer games which contain violence are very popular. Some people believe that they have a negative effect on society and so should be banned. Other people, however, say that they are just harmless and help people to relax. Discuss both points of view and five your own opinion.

COHERENCE AND COHESION: 4.0 4 Structure your answers in logical paragraphs 9 Include an introduction and conclusion 6 Support main points with an explanation and
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an example 4 Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately 9 Vary your linking phrases using synonyms LEXICAL RESOURCE: 5.0 7 Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms 5 Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes GRAMMATICAL RANGE: 5.0 9 Use a variety of complex and simple sentences 5 Check your writing for errors
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • desensitize
  • aggressive behavior
  • vulnerable groups
  • stress relief
  • media literacy
  • creative expression
  • censorship
  • rating systems
  • parental guidance
  • economic implications
  • mitigate
  • outlet for aggression
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