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Group or team activities can teach more important skills for life than those activities which are done alone. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, it is argued that leading
team
’s
activities
 could improve personal competencies, even more than individual work.
This
 essay agrees with that statement because
work
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 in
group
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the group
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 could improve
the
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interpersonal intelligence. When people talk about
team
activities
, exists many reasons to believe that it is an exceptional tool to have more opportunities in several areas, not only in job or career,
otherwise
 in personal life. Many authors in organizational psychology,
team
 building and social studies affirm that
group
activities
 could increase important abilities
such
 as communication with other people, leadership, empathy, sense of belonging, resolution and management conflicts, even could have a huge impact
in
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 self-knowledge, stress and self-esteem.
For example
,
Colleman
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Coleman
, author of several emotional intelligence books and important research, has discovered that teamwork can significantly improve personal and
group
 performance, even rise productivity,
thus
, he has recommended
team
activities
 when exists difficult in
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the work
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 environment. Another reason why the promotion of
team
activities
 should be recognized
,
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 is the fact that
human
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learn
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 vicariously
since
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early
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an early
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 age,
in other words
, a person, even a child can learn
watching
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 others,
moreover
,
group
activities
 give feedback about personal performance and skills and increase the opportunities to develop better networking and adequate social support.
For example
, many school teachers are implementing
group
activities
such
 as projects whit the objective of improving students' personal and
group
 learning,
as a result
, students can learn from each other, improve their social relationships with peers, make friends, even they may have more excellent academic results. In conclusion,
team
activities
 are a wonderful strategy to develop and improve personal and social skills, not only in organization or jobs
,
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also
 in personal life, no matter if it is about adult, teen or child,
moreover
, gives an excellent opportunity to learn from others and receive feedback about different topics.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • communication skills
  • problem-solving
  • collaboration
  • conflict resolution
  • leadership
  • accountability
  • social connections
  • networks
  • adaptability
  • empathy
  • diverse personalities
  • real-world environments
  • team dynamics
  • group cohesion
  • interpersonal skills
  • delegation
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