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64. The tradition that the family gets together to eat meals is disappearing. What are the reasons? What are the impacts?

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In the past, it was common for a family to have
meals
 together in a dining room. Yet, nowadays, that
tradition
 seems to vanish. I believe the reasons are coming from today's trend.
First
 of all,
parents
 nowadays are busier than
parents
 in the past
time
. They work 9 to 5 in order to earn a quality living. Indeed, economic matters increased a few decades ago. But, there is one
tradition
 that many
parents
 forget, eat
meals
 together as a family. Aside from a busy lifestyle, I feel like
this
tradition
also
 slowly disappearing due to the advances in technology. People including many
parents
 and their
children
 too busy with their online life and forget about their surroundings.
Hence
, when it comes to mealtimetime, they tend to shrug it off and choose to eat later since they do not want to leave their virtual life. Undoubtedly,
this
 trend would bring impacts on the future. A
meals
time
 is used to create a bond between
parents
 and their
children
. They can have an intimate conversation and build chemistry with each other. Yet, because
this
tradition
 is vanishing, the affection between families
also
 decreased.
As a result
, there would be many rough kids who were going to turn into bad behaviours adults and may
also
 inherit
this
 from their
children
. To sum up,
parents
 must try to spend their
time
 with their
children
 more through
meals
time
 in order to create a good future.

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