The free movement of goods across national borders has long been a controversial issue. Some people argue that it is necessary for economic growth, while others claim that it damages local industries. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is true that the free movement of products in national borders has been known as a controversial argument for a long time. Some individuals said that
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however
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some people call for that it is dangerous for industries in their country. In the essay, I will argue both views and state my position.
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, some people who support the expansion of global export deal that
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can grow faster when they have some specialist in a few
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but have strong advantages. As a
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, many
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can produce value
product
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each
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countries
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.
For instance
, Japan and China create electrical goods, Thailand plants food clops.
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a lot of money for many regions and create a space for communication with each other.
On the other hand
, some people believe that a free and open market eliminate some local
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communication
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, when a nation
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neccesary
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items from
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, all
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will be cheaper and some local industries will be lost.
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government
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should fix regulations about importation and
exportaion
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exportation
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for citizens
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and making economic growth. To
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, both
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claims
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own
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arguments
about international trade. If
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government
govenment
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fix regulation about international trading, it will be good for both side.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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