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You recently encountered some problems with a public transportation service in your area. Write a letter to the manager of the public transport company and say - where and what the problems were - explain how these problems affect the public - suggest what changes could be made to improve the situation

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to inform you about a recent incident that occurred on one of your buses. I was travelling on the number 32 bus in District 1 Ho Chi Minh City when the driver caused a traffic accident. The driver was driving over the speed limit and
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 driving in the wrong lane, and
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 caused him to crash into a motorbike. Many of your passengers, including myself, were very angry because they were late for work.
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 was because they had to switch to the
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 bus while the bus got delayed due to severe congestion on the road
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 of the accident. To make matters worse, some of your customers suffered minor injuries,
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 as whiplash. I would like to suggest that your drivers have to undergo regular driving tests to ensure that they are fully competent and aware of the rules of the road. You could
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 place a phone number on the back of all buses so that the public can make complaints about any reckless driving. I look forward to your response. Yours faithfully, Tom Hanks
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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