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Some people think it’s better to choose friends who always have same opinions as them. Other people believe it’s good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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There are some individuals who argue that it's good to choose companions who always have similar viewpoints as
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 some consider it's beneficial to have different
thoughts
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opinions
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This
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the
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both
opinions
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believe
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 that it's better to have a disagreement with
friends
 sometimes which will actually improve our
thoughts
 and visions. To start with, mates with different visions are really appreciable since it will help a person to view the issues
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an
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another angle and get a clear picture
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it
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.
Friends
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 a great influence in our life,
someome
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someone
 who always give support in everything is not
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 right choice since we will not be able to choose the right path sometimes a correction and
guidence
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guidance
 is always a
necessary
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.But, it is not healthy when the arguments are frequent,it should be productive and must not be pulling back our lives. On the
otherhand
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other hand
, when we have
friends
 with similar
opinions
its
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 will be more enjoyable and will
gives
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 more knowledge and points on the
thoughts
. It will benefit a person to get the support and understanding in each and everything that we need to achieve and acquire.
Such
 friendship will
engenders
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 a passion within the people and
to
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achieve their goals.But the con of
such
 companionship will be the unawareness of different
thoughts
 and views. To conclude,as the infrequent disagreements within mates are always good ,it
nurture
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 everyone to be a human with understanding in differents views where
friends
 with same views will be able to achieve passion together with
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support.I
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believe
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belive
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 that a person should be always
considerative
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considerate
consideration
 of
others
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opinions
 as well which will be achievable by a friend with a different opinion.
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