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some people want to live in a house while others prefer living in an apartment. compare and contrast the two ideas.

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NOWADAYS LIVING IN A HOUSE IS SEEN
PREFERABLE
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AS PREFERABLE
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 AS MUCH AS LIVING IN AN APARTMENT.
THIS
 ESSAY WILL EXPLAIN WHAT ARE THE ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES OF
ACCOMODATION
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ACCOMMODATION
 OPTIONS AND WHY PEOPLE MAY PREFER TO LIVE IN THEM. NOWADAYS, HOUSES ARE PREFERED BY SOME PEOPLE ALL OVER THE WORLD
ALTHOUGH
 THEY REQUIRE MORE ENERGY AND
TIME
 TO
MAINTENANCE
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MAINTAIN
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. THEY PROVIDE SPACIOUS AND QUIET
AREA
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AREAS
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MOREOVER
COMFORT
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COMFORTABLE
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 LIFE. IN QUARANTINE TIMES, BEING FAR AWAY CROWDED AND NOISE
IN ADDITION
 TO
CHANCE
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THE CHANCE
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 OF SPENDING
TIME
 IN GARDEN AND OPEN PRIVATE SPACE MAKE HOUSES THE DREAM OF EVERYONE.
ON THE OTHER HAND
, APARTMENTS PROVIDE
MORE
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A MORE
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 ACTIVE LIFE AND EASY ACCESS TO FACILITIES. REPAIRS OR MAINTENANCE WORKS CAN BE DONE BY A WORKER WHOSE JOB IS
THIS
. BECAUSE OF THEIR LOCATION, THEY GENERALLY ARE LOCATED CENTER OF CITY, CONNECTION WITH OTHER PEOPLE OR SOME SERVICES IS ALWAYS POSSIBLE REGARDLESS OF
TIME
.
FOR INSTANCE
, THE OTHER NIGHT I WAS FEELING PRETTY DEPRESSED AND IMMEDIATELY MADE A CALL FOR ONE OF MY FRIENDS. FIFTEEN MINUTES LATER, WE WERE AT A COSY CAFE AND DRINKING
THIRD GENERATION
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THIRD-GENERATION
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 COFFEE.
THAT
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AT THAT
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TIME
 IDEA OF LIVING ALONE IN A HOUSE SEEMED IMPOSSIBLE TO ME.
BESIDES
 ADVANTAGES, LOCATION MAY CAUSE NOISE PROBLEMS WHEN YOU WANT TO BE IN PEACE, ONE ANGRY DRIVER MAY DISRUPT YOUR RELAX
TIME
.
IN
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TO
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 SUM UP, REGARDLESS OF WHERE WE LIVE, THERE WILL BE ALWAYS
SOME
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apply
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TIMES WHEN WE HAVE TO CONFRONT SOME OBSTACLES
IN ADDITION
 TO GOODNESSES. WE HAVE TO DECIDE WHICH ONE OF THESE OPTIONS SUGGEST US MORE BEAUTY.
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