These days, more and more people move away from the area where they were born and brought up when they become adults. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Currently, there is much discussion with regard to

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out from the hometown.It is argued that there are a

lot

of

people

move

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to the

city

when they are mature. I believe that there are a

lot

of advantages for moving to the

city

which was developed

such

as the

city

has a

lot

of

companies

which is international

companies

or huge

companies

and they can reach educations in the

city

which has quality but there is

disavantage

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disadvantage

that can not be overlooked

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such as

the

traffic

congention

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congestion

convention

is

norm

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in the

city

. On the one side of benefits when

people

growthup

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growth up

growth

and

moveto

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move to

the

the

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city

. The

principle

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advantage is that has a

lot

of

companies

which is accepted

from

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worldwide and they has a

lot

of

opputunity

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opportunity

for getting the job.

For example

,

Bangkok

which is the

captitalof

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capital of

Thailand. There are a

lot

of rural

person

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to

Bangkok

for finding

the

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job because has a

lot

of department

that

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that company

those companies

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companies

would like to hire.

Furthermore

,

companies

in

Bangkok

which is

a

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enormous

companiesand

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companies and

international

companies

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such

as Shoppee company , CP company which has a good paid.

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, most

of

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companies in

companies

companiesin

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the companiesin

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rural

is

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factory. In

additional

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, The

city

has a

lot

of

university

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and

people

can reach educations

that

is

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very

convenience

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.

For instance

,

Bangkok

has a

lotof

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lot of

lot

good

universitywhich

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university which

is

garanteed

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guaranteed

from worldwide and got a top rank

universiry

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university

such

as CU , TU or KU. Everyone can learn and get free courses for developing with the life from the university.

Hence

,

people

in urban would like to

move

to the

city

which was developed.For good life and quality life.

On the other hand

, there is

negative

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side

in

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this

city

suchas

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such as

the

trafficis

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traffic is

very bad. A good case

in

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at

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this

point is

Bangkok

has

traffic

which is very

turribl

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terrible

terribly

. The worker has to drive a car to go

the

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office

at

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for at

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least 1 hour because the

traffic

very

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bad.

Nevertheless

, urban

do

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not have a problem with

the

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traffic

. In conclusion, the

present day

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thereare

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there are

a

lot

of

people

from rural

moveto

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move to

the

city

because the

city

has a

lotof

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lot of

benefits

such

as chances for finding the job or educations that everyone can reach but there is a negative side that

people

can not be overlooked as the

trafficis

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traffic is

bad.