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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

#growth #shops #towns #cities
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Presently, with technology advancing rapidly, there are lots of ways to go shopping. Some
people
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 prefer to go shopping online while other
people
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 still go to the store. As we live a hasty life, some
people
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 don’t have much time to go to the mall or shopping centre. That’s why they opt to buy anything on the internet
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 of going to the mall. Online Market is a great option. It provides a wide range of products that sometimes cannot find it easily in a local market.
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 that, it is a great way to reduce any unnecessary expenses
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 as fuel or parking fees.
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, online shopping often offers a huge sale promotion to the consumers.
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, I would like to mention the delivery process that sometimes could make
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 nervous. The period of delivery could be delayed.
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, there are still so many
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 who enjoy going to the supermarket like me. I believe most
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 have the idea that they need to see real products before purchasing them. Especially, some kinds of groceries like vegetables, fruits or meats. So that,
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 could choose better goods for themselves.
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, sometimes a shopping centre is a place that allows
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 to spend some time together. Parents could take their children to the indoor amusement zone, or even couples are able to go to the restaurant after finishing shopping. In conclusion, Both of these views put forward valid points.
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, I strongly believe that in the future,
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 will still go out shopping or get any services from the store.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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