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Some people refers to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

#people #lives #change
Nowadays urbanization in the cities is rising and rising because more and more
people
 are moving to the
center
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 and it can open to
them
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the
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 many ways to increase their career way and so that they move to the city but it is
also
 important to know that the countryside too important in the system of
republic
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the republic
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 and I try to explain it in my essay.
Firstly
 of all,it can be problematic to the government if all
people
 in the republic move to the city because
oversupplying
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 population can destroy infrastructure and purity of state
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, for instance,
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for instance
 the production may not be enough for population
factoryes
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factories
 just may not be on time to produce the product for residents and it may be problems with
meal
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 because there are too many
people
. The solution
of
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the
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this
 problem
that
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 we should make modern and modern
countrysides
 because more and more
people
 are moving to the cities
for
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this
 reason, we should make all terms for
people
 which live there and it is important to pay attention to the
countrysides
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. From a neutral field of view plus
of
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moving to the
center
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centre
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 can rise up the level of perspectives in
increase
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 prospects across industries and global rankings
such
 as in education, industry and so on. But we should not forget about
countrysides
 as
industryes
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industries
 which can develop in
countrysides
 is
also
 important in our lives and in the system of
state
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. In
conclusion
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 we should do everything to make
people
 feel comfortable in
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the countrysides
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countrysides
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
  • transformation
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