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Many people believe that it is a good idea to have a dress code at workplaces. ‎Do you agree or disagree with your statement? Give your opinion and ‎examples from your own experience.

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Dressing up has always been a way of showing commitment towards an institution or a
workplace
. Dressing up for
workplace
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the workplace
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 has
it's
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 own pros and cons which will be discussed in
details
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detail
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 in the following paragraphs. Uniforming up for
workplace
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the workplace
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 increases
marketability
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the marketability
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 of an
organisation
, so I totally agree with the statement given.
Firstly
, the idea of having a
dresscode
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dress code
 for
workplace
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the workplace
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 not only provides a sense of uniformity in the way an individual dresses up
,
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 but
also
 gives people a sense of belongingness.
For example
, when I used to work in an
organisation
 we used to have a
dresscode
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dress code
 which was wearing a shirt and
pant
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pants
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 which was
complusory
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compulsory
, it used to show unity in all the co-workers who were from different backgrounds.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, a
dresscode
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dress code
also
 creates a persona that every individual is the part of
same
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the same
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organisation
 no one is above or below
from
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apply
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anyone
working
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forworking
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 the
organisation
.
For example
, when my
firend
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friend
 used to work in an
organisation
 we used to have
a
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the
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 same
color
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colour
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 code for everyone irrespective of what one was wearing it used to show professionalism towards the
organisation
. So in conclusion, I agree with the fact that we should have
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dress code
dresscode
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a dresscode
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 at
workplace
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the workplace
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 as it
show
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shows
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 sheer commitment,
sense
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a sense
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 of belongingness and professionalism towards any
organisation
 that an individual is working for.
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