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In cities and town all over the world the high volume of traffic is a problem. what are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem?

#cities #town #world #volume #traffic #actions
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which is increasing rapidly, is the most threatening issue the world faces today. In
this
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century
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this
 is a major
issues
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 a high volume of traffic but
first
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all
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 we need to
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understand
 what is leading to
such
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issues
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 there some several steps which can be taken to tackle
this
problem
 which
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, the main issue is that all over the world the high number of
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 who
people
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use
 to their transportation and
that is
 why traffic is a is
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problem
. In
addisionally
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additionally
additional
,
this
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noise pollution and
also
 air
polluction
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pollution
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affecte
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affected
affecting
people
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 body and
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heath
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 who are live that rush area.
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policman
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as a result
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stress all day and
also
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a
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some health
problem
 because of air
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pollution
. To
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slove
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this
problem
,
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are avoid
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 to
use
 a high volume
Vehicals
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Vehicles
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it
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to
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 electrical cars.
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, most of the
people
use
 their own car or bike to go
thier
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their
work place
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.
Instead
 of, they can
use
transport
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 facility.
On
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the
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other word, In one particular
area
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their
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 so many
people
are
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 Updown daily in their own car so
instead
 of they can
use
bus
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 or train or taxi
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as a result
 It will help to reduce
traffic
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problem
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. In conclusion, despite
of
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own car or bike, bicycle and walking
prefere
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prefer
 most when going in
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short distance which is helpful to reduce noise and are pollution.
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