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In cities and town all over the world the high volume of traffic is a problem. what are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem?

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which is increasing rapidly, is the most threatening issue the world faces today. In
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century
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 a high volume of traffic but
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 of
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understand
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issues
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 there some several steps which can be taken to tackle
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, the main issue is that all over the world the high number of
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people
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use
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 to their transportation and
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 why traffic is a is
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problem
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addisionally
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additionally
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noise pollution and
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polluction
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pollution
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affected
affecting
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people
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 body and
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heath
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 who are live that rush area.
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policman
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policeman
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stress all day and
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a
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some health
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 because of air
polluction
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pollution
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solve
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slove
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this
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problem
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,
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are avoid
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 to
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 a high volume
Vehicals
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Vehicles
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it
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to
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 electrical cars.
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, most of the
people
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 their own car or bike to go
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their
work place
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workplace
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transport
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 facility.
On
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the
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other word, In one particular
area
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their
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there
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 so many
people
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are
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 of they can
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bus
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 or train or taxi
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 It will help to reduce
traffic
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the traffic
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problem
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. In conclusion, despite
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own car or bike, bicycle and walking
prefere
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prefer
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short distance which is helpful to reduce noise and are pollution.

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