Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high schoool programs.for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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being a mandatory part of high school programs.on the other
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, doing charity
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improve the place where you live or adolescent have to
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with sports facilities.in my opinion I completely
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statement.
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as a volunteer, have
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opportunity for a student to learn something new from society.,
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the education system will
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be improved. in fact, is working as a social worker pupils are able to express their ideas in front of others clearly.
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the university of new york. ,
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almost 60 per cent of people gain more knowledge in practical life regarding those who did not participate in social trust.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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