Being a celebrity-such as film star or sports personality-brings problems as well as benefits. do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?

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few decades, there
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an exponential rise in the VIP culture throughout the globe.
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lifestyle was always debatable but now it has become more controversial as the general public
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sometimes
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power to get their work done on priority. I think
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trend has certain advantages and disadvantages
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, its merits
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its demerits. In a subsequent ,paragraph I intend to shed light on the given topic with a proper conclusion and an appropriate illustration. Analysing the statement and explaining
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, the first and foremost benefit of being an elite class is ,
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that they
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earned handsome income and incentives from films, brand endorsements, programmes and many more.
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, they received high-class services from various government and non-government departments.
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, most
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the
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International airports
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VIP entrance gates or priority
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where they can
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assess
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the
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immigration or an aeroplane.
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, they received a plethora of gifts not only from companies but
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from their fans and followers.
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, being a public figure has some drawbacks as they have to socialize their life on numerous social apps
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as Instagram, Facebook, Twitter and many more, which sometimes backfire on them.
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, the case of body-shaming has increased against the female actresses on their public posts.
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, fraudsters can use
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names to gain undue wealth and business advantages. To Vindicate, in India recently a cone man imposed as a friend of many celebrities, cheats various
businessman
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businessmen
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and blackmail them. To summarize, as discussed in the aforementioned argument I can conclude that, being a
films
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star or sports personality is not an easy task, as they are bonded with ethics and social responsibility.
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, they had to live life in a prudent and pragmatic way.
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task response
The essay provides a clear response to the prompt by discussing the benefits and problems of being a celebrity. However, more examples could be included to strengthen the argument.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present and help in framing the discussion. To improve coherence, ensure smooth transitions between paragraphs and provide more linking words to connect ideas.
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