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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#organisations #employees #dress #value #quality #work #appearance
Quality of
work
first
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dress
 smartly increase productivity by
uniform
 and feeling of
team
 boost confident para2 quality
dont
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don't
 care
appearance
 apple chill can increase
work
 done Many companies are debating over the periodization of policies and the importance of dressing. With that in mind, researchers argue whether the
appearance
 or the
work
 outputs is more significant in
company's
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 atmosphere.
This
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the
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good-looking apparel but will
provides
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 each argumentative's
points
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point
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 for both sides. Analysing freedom of clothes selection creates
more
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a more
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 productive environment, which outweighs the feeling of being a
team
 by wearing
uniform
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a uniform
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.
Firstly
, well-dressed workers will be more confident and feel unity across the
team
.
For instance
,
Tintley
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Tinley
 and Brent
has
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 a navy blue
uniform
 with
red
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a red
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 tie, which
seperates
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separates
 them
apart
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 other legal companies. Interestingly,
dress
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the dress
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 code is boost employees'
confident
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 substantially because it produces
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a
the
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feeling of being one of the
team
.
Therefore
,
this
 makes clear that
dress
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dressing
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 smartly is highly
benefitial
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beneficial
 to the organization's growth.
On the other hand
, it is better to wear apparel
depends
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depending
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 on
individual's
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an individual's
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 preferences.
For example
, Google allows their workers to wear anything,
this
 results in mounting performance later on. In fact,
"comfortable"
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a "comfortable"
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 environment has proved to be the best at creating creative
work
 in
short
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 period of time.
This
 makes
distinct
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the distinct
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 claim that
dress
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dressing
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 comfortably is highly
benefitial
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beneficial
 to the company's growth. In conclusion,
focus
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focusing
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 less on
appearance
 is better than the strict
uniform
; our analysis above provides
the
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supports
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support
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 for both sides. In the
last
 year, psychologists debunked all the claims; in fact,
appearance
 is irrelevant to productivity.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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