Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of a high school programme ( for example working for charity, Improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children) To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The world has become a safer place due to the volunteers. There is a debate between people as the free volunteering activities should be a mandatory of high school programs as
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, improving the neighbourhood or coaching the youngsters for sports. I totally agree with
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are the places which are crafted children towards that aim. By imposing to engage social services, Pupils are gradually
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, ‘
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student who was appeared against global warming has begun a remarkable influence
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wellbeing.
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pupils are being under stress due to the heavy workload at school at
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. In order to happen
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, strain and even
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the kids. To overcome the strain that children faced nowadays
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of charitable works are essential. Since
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the daily routine is
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to change and the community works
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the mental health to them simultaneously. All in all,
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charitable works to be
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syllabus whereas pupils encourage to engage in social wellbeing as well as to improve their mental and physical health. As I truly agree with the statement and it is proved in
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • altruism
  • social responsibility
  • cultivate
  • mandatory
  • detract
  • academic pursuits
  • forced labor
  • ineffective efforts
  • voluntary participation
  • autonomy
  • impactful engagement
  • bridge social divides
  • fostering understanding
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