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the information about the number of the UK marriages and divorces between 1956 and 2006.

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The given line graph illustrates the information about the number of UK weddings and divorces between 1956 and 2006. Overall, there was an overall fall in the number of weddings in British, while the
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 of divorce indicated an upward trend. Starting in 1955, there was a steep increase in the
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 of all
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 and
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marriages
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;
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, the five years following 1996 saw all
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 and
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marriages
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 rates show similar amounts of variation; between 450000 and 490000 in the
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 of all weddings and 370000 and 390000 in the
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 of
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first
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 marriage.From that point onwards, the
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 numbers showed a significant fall, with the period of fluctuation, falling at just under 300000 in all
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rate
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 and around 190000 in
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marriages
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 in 2006.
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, until the initial 1970, there was a jump in the
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 of remarriages,
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 trend could not be sustained and from that point onwards remarriage numbers witnessed a slight decline until it reaching at just over 100000 at the end of the period.
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, the divorce rates rise dramatically, with almost twenty times as numerous rates in 2006, compared to the number in 1956.
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