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the comparison of energy production in four various kinds between 1995 and 2005.

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The given pie charts illustrate the comparison of power manufacture in four various kinds between 1995 and 2005. It is clear that overall alternative energy production increased slightly from 1995 to 2005. While the manufacture of petroleum was as high as gas and coal in 1995, the amount of petroleum produced fell dramatically in 2005. Looking at the
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 main feature,in 1995 only 6.40% of Nuclear power was produced, but
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 figure rose to 10.10% in 2005.
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, while only 4.90% of other kinds of power was produced in 2005, approximately one time as many productions of these in ten years later. With regard to another main feature, the proportion of gas produced rose minimally from 29.63% in 1995 to 30.31% in 2005.
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, there was a mere increase in the proportion of coal production from 29.80% to 30.93% over the 10-year period.
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, a fall in petroleum manufacture in 2005 reflects the fact that more alternative energy was produced in that year.
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