Some experts are concerned that people in modern society change their electronic devices when not necessary.

The two diagrams indicate the changed layout of the apartment, before and after the design of the flat was constructed. Before being remodelled, it had two bedrooms opposite the hall.
In addition
, the doors of the two bedrooms were located
next
to each other, and each room have one window, respectively.
Also
, the ex-apartment has a lot of left space, which is not used by a room. By looking at the remodelled house, it is clear that many kinds of things were changed and many rooms appeared. The most varied thing is that the newly-constructed flat has three rooms. Plus, lots of places were built
such
as a closet, shower, WC, and laundry. It is evident that the form of bedrooms become different and the number of windows changed too compared to the past. Overall, the former flat looks like not using the spaces efficiently, since there are no facilities like WC, shower, laundry room, which are needed for living.
On the other hand
, the new flat which has undergone remodelling
,
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has many rooms that many people must require for living.
Therefore
we can figure out the construction was quite big but it was needed for tenants who decided to live in that flat.(197)
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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