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A big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree?

#salary #job #satisfaction
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From my point of view, I'm not convinced that
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 enjoyment is less crucial than huge earning since many benefits we can get if we think more about
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satisfaction
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 and there are many things that we should consider when deciding to take a
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 than
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. I will
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 extend and elaborate my reasons and followed by a reasoned conclusion. The other thing we consider when deciding on a
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 is responsibility. Choosing a big
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 means that we
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 have a big responsibility. We should examine our competence, are we can do all of the responsibility? Are we can handle the workload? Are we have enough break time? It seems useless if we get a big
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, but we do not have enough time for family or ourselves.
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satisfaction
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 refers to the attitude and feelings people have about their
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. I believe that there are more advantages to think about
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 satisfactory than
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 because there is much pressure when our
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 is not our passion.
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, if our
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 suits our interests, we can pass all challenging times because we do what we love.
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, we can have better results of the
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, and it can boost our performance score and make the possibility of promotion higher. In
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 condition, we can get both
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satisfaction
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 and a big
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. In conclusion,
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 contentment is more crucial to consider than a big
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. It is caused by the advantage of thinking about
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 less than we consider about
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satisfaction
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.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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