IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4.5

the main source of energy for USA between 1980 and 1990.

The given pie charts illustrate the main source of
energy
Use synonyms
 for the USA between 1980 and 1990. It is clear that overall alternative
energy
Use synonyms
 use increased moderately from 1980 to 1990. While most of the
energy
Use synonyms
 used in the USA was oil in 1980, the amount of oil consumed fell steadily in 1990. Looking at the
first
Linking Words
 main feature,in 1980 only 22% of using coal power, but
this
Linking Words
 figure rose gradually to 27% in 1990.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, while only 5% of nuclear power consuming in 1980, approximately one times as many consumes ten years later. With regard to another main feature, the proportion of natural gas was used minimal drop from 26% in 1980 to 25% in 1990.
On the contrary
Linking Words
, the number of hydroelectric power consumed remained relatively constant at only 5% over the period.
Finally
Linking Words
, a fall in the number of oil consumed in 1990 reflects the fact that more alternative
energy
Use synonyms
 was consumed in the USA.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »- a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: