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the comparison of the Thailand online sales in six various sectors between 1958 and 2008.

The given pie charts illustrate the comparison of Thailand's online sales in six various sectors between 1958 and 2008. It is clear that overall sales of
entertainment
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goods
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 increased moderately from 1958 to 2008. While most of the consumption was the food in 1958, the
entertainment
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 product sold numbers was the most popular in 2008. Looking at the
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 main feature,in 1985, there was only 7% of luxury
goods
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 sold numbers,but
this
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 figure rose dramatically to 17% in 2008.
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, while only 8% of the travel sector was consumed in 1985, approximately one times as many people consumed
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 sector fifty years later.
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, the figure for
entertainment
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goods
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 sold increased dramatically from 22% in 1958 to 32% over the period. With regard to another main feature, the proportion of food consumption numbers experienced a significant decrease from 32% in 1958 to only 12% 50-year later.
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, the proportion of housing
goods
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 sold steady decline from 13% to 6% over the same period.
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, a fall in the number of clothing sale figures in 2008 reflects more consumption in
entertainment
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, travel, luxury
goods
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 sectors in that year.

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