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Being a celebrity-such as film star or sports personality-brings problems as well as benefits. do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?

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Nowadays, there are occupations
who
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provided by
the
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society
. If we look into social
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media
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medias
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media
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, there's
a
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plenty of influencers who influence
people
 to do and behave something like they do. Let's take a look for an example of
job
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a job
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 that influences others'
perspective
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perspectives
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,
celebrity
.
Celebrity
 is a
person
 who
entertain
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entertains
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people
 with his
/
her talents. When we saw the movie, the
person
 who takes a role is a film star. Based on many perspectives, there
are
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 a
society
who
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that
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 don't support the role of
celebrity
 and some
society
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societies
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do
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.
For example
, many
people
 think that a
celebrity
, a film star, makes a
priviledge
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privilege
 to
society
 to become a famous
person
 despite
of
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become
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becoming
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 a smart
person
.
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Becoming
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 a
celebrity
 itself could be
benefitial
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beneficial
 for certain
people
,
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 because some peers think that
people
 who jump into
entertainment
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the entertainment
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 world are
people
 who polish their
potentials
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potential
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 in acting, singing, dancing and etcetera.
However
,
become
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becoming
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 a
celebrity
also
 could be
problem
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a problem
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,
for instance
, they will be lack
of
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privacy, since the journalist and media are following them
everyday
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every day
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 and
everytime
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. It will limit the freedom of
actress
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actresses
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,
actor
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actors
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,
musician
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musicians
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 and etcetera.
In addition
, there is
also
 an occupation
who
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that
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 entertain
people
by
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with
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 their talent, which is sports,
for
example
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,example
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 an
athlete
. An
athlete
 tends to entertain
people
by
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with
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 his
/
her accomplishments. If he
/
she contributes to some competitions, the euphoria of the
olympic
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Olympic
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 is legit.
People
 are trying to support them because he
/
she could give
a
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achievement to the country. One of the good points
become
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 an
athlete
 is study is not necessary for the athletes because they will contribute by their physical power and skills. Some
people
also
 think that
become
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becoming
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 an
athlete
 will be famous by their capability to narrowed his
/
her skills to specific sports.
Although
, based
of
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on
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holders
older
olders
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an olders
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 point of view,
become
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becoming
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 an
athlete
 is one of the easiest
job
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jobs
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 because an
athlete
 doesn't study hard. To sum up, two particular jobs
such
 as film star and an
athlete
 have positive and negative perspectives to certain
people
. Yet, every
job
 has their specializations that
makes
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 the
job
 is hard to achieve and to accomplish. It is contingent
to
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people
's opinions.

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