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Some people prefer to shop for food from supermarket. Others prefer to do their food shopping online. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The amount of
people
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 buying their
groceries
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 online is on the rise. More and more
people
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 prefer buying their
groceries
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 while laying on the sofa,
instead
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 of walking to a supermarket. The question arises if
this
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 is a good development. In the upcoming paragraphs, I will discuss both views. From my point of
view
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 it is a good development that there are more ways to buy
groceries
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 than going to the store.
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 is because there are many
people
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 with a physical disease. As a consequence of
this
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 will it be very hard for that group of
people
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 to go to a physical place for their
groceries
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. Because of the possibility of shopping online, these
people
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 can stay home while doing the purchase of supplies.
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,
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 development will
also
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 lead to a decrease in
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prices. If there are more ways to buy your
groceries
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, it
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 means that there are more players on the market.
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, the prices will go down because of the higher supply on the market. I think that we have to maintain both the physical- and digital marketplaces. By doing so, we can facilitate the easy manner of doing the
groceries
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 for a lot of
people
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.
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