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Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart illustrates the information about the population who own the computers, and the remaining bar chart illustrates the detail about
computer
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 ownership by five different education levels between 2002 and 2010. The charts are given in
percentages
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. Overall, it is apparent that the
percentages
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 of
computer
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 ownership were highest in 2010. While postgraduate qualification
level
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 got the highest
percentages
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 for who owned the
computer
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 between 2002 and 2010.
On the other hand
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, no high school diploma
level
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 acquired the lowest
percentages
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. As we see, the population who owned the computers was an upward trend from 2002 to 2010. There stared nearly 60% in 2002 and slightly increased to reach the highest percentage at around 78% in 2010. Apparently, all education levels got the low
percentages
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 of
computer
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 ownership in 2002 when compared with 2010. The postgraduate qualification
level
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 contained the biggest
percentages
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 (80
%
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in 2002 and nearly 100% in 2010) followed by bachelor’s degree, college, and high school graduate in both 2002 and 2010, respectively. Meanwhile, no high school diploma
level
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 have owned the computers at the lowest
percentages
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 around 15% in 2002 and 40% in 2010.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend
  • Pattern
  • Fluctuation
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Comparison
  • Relationship
  • Correlation
  • Significant
  • Implication
  • Prediction
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